Opening Paragraph Critique

If you have a Work in Progress (aka WIP), I would love to read the opening paragraph. I'm sure some of my readers would love to read it as well. So, here's what you need to do. Click the LINK here and go to my website. Go to the COMMENTS page and fill out the form, pasting your opening paragraph into the comment. I will create a separate post of each writer's work, so that readers can comment on each post.

I hope everyone will be honest, constructive, yet kind in their critiques of the works posted.

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